T1+Persuade

9/4/11- Great work Flynn your mindomap is awesome, you have asked some great questions here and as a result gained information. Remember to use language features in your 'kiwi's are the best' persuasive writing. We will discuss this on Monday. (discussed and edited together today 11/04/11)

__Friday 8th April__

Literacy Amazing race

LI: I am learning to develop effective questions and draw conclusions from my findings **.**

Success Criteria:

*Create a mindomo on what makes us kiwi and write a paragraph on why kiwis are the best. *Persuade the reader why kiwis are the best. *Use a variety of questions from the 7 servants *Use a variety of open and closed questions to extract relevant information Reflection: This activity has taken me a couple of days to complete but I am happy with the ending result. I learnt about my heritage and found it very interesting.

22/3/11 Flynn this is amazing writing! You are so convincing and have incorporated many of the language resources that you have learnt. Keep it up and you will go far with your writing! Include a list of your language resources that are in your hard learning journal.

__Monday 21 March__

Literacy writing

LI: I am learning to write a persuasive letter.

Success Criteria: *To persuade the reader *Use some Synonyms *Descriptive words eg adjectives, adverbs, similies, metaphors. *Strong verbs *Imperative (command) *Rhetorical question *Facts and data (statistics) *Repitition *Exaggeration

= Transport in the devastated earthquake city of Christchurch =

Dear parent/caregiver

Good evening my name is Flynn Alexander. I am writing this letter to inform you of the appalling state of the city streets after the devastating Christchurch earthquake. I have stated below my reasons why you should not use the roads of Christchurch except in emergencies.

A key problem for Civil Defence and emergency services is that cars are getting stuck in traffic jams, and as a result are blocking the streets of Christchurch which is a major obstacle for emergency services who are already struggling to travel through the demolished streets. Just imagine if you were part of a medical team and you couldn’t get to someone who was about to die, what would you do? And how would you feel? I bet that you would be so petrified that you wouldn’t even know what to do.

Service vehicles which include electrical workers, sewage and drainage repair teams need to be able to travel to the location where they are needed quickly and efficiently. This way services will be restored to homes and business’s sooner so that living conditions will return to normal. For example, sleeping in a bed that is in your own house. What if there was a burst sewage pipe in the suburbs and you went out to see the destruction in the city, you get halfway, run out of fuel, and block the street. The drainage repair team comes along to fix the burst sewage pipe but they can’t get there because you’re in the way, and in all this time people are having their suburbs filled with sewage. I know that you wouldn’t be able to stand the stench of sewage for as long as those poor people had to, in fact, I’m pretty sure you wouldn’t be able to smell it for more than ten seconds.

If you really need to go into the city you could use public transport instead of your car, buses are now working and are traveling all throughout Christchurch. Using the public services decreases the amount of cars on the road. This also has a positive effect on the community with less dust being created from the dried up liquefaction. Another great way of transportation is a trusty bicycle or your walking feet. You will also save money this way. Whenever you go out to see whats happened do not walk towards your car instead turn around and get your bike out, you might even lose a few pounds doing this.

Don’t be a nosey parker and get in the way of Civil Defense and repair teams, instead stay in your own suburb. If it’s an emergency, sure go out, but instead use the public transport. Personally I wouldn’t go out at all because I wouldn’t want people slowly driving through my neighbourhood and looking at my home, I would feel...dreadful, I would feel like a peasant on the side of the road. So don’t use the roads, stay inside and keep safe.

Yours Sincerely Flynn Alexander

Reflection: I am convinced that I have persuaded the reader and I am very proud of this piece of writing.